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The attitude of people on seal

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The pie chart describes the results of survey, between 1997 and 2006 in which humans were asked to buy how their behavior became In short Between 1997 and 2006 years the attitude on sale was almost raised between a few years. That it to say it improved to better toward in 2006. It is essential to mention that the most important thing or service was raised with acutely. Advising and dealing with people was increased. Unfortunately, selling products were decreased. From my point of view If the quality of products is good, It will be better extant of selling than worthless things. Such as, The amount of the knowledge of products were more than a third. But this percentage was changed to higher with slowly. That it to say percentage of knowledge of products in 1997 became almost two fifths in 2006. Selling a thing was a quarter. Because of the fact that people in 1997 years were interested in new things or products and they bought anything although what they were like. But in 2006 the Mind of people improved and they bought things or products which they need. It is easy to understand if you advise more information about a thing which Customers or clients were going to buy, it may bring that your customer to decide faster. So in 1997 Advising and caring for customers were more than a third and that percentage was changed to less than two fifths in 2006. It is clear that People in 1997 years were rich but not all of them. For instance poor or average humans were very a lot, so sellers had to deal with them. Because they had a little money to buy something, In 1997, Dealing with people was three fifths, but poor people increased, so in 2006 years this quantity became two thirds.
The pie chart
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describes
the results of survey, between 1997 and 2006 in which humans
were asked
to
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buy
how their behavior became

In short Between 1997 and 2006 years the attitude on sale was almost raised between a few years. That it to say it
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improved
to better toward in 2006. It is essential to mention that the most
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important
thing or service
was raised
with
acutely
. Advising and dealing with
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people
was increased
. Unfortunately, selling
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products
were decreased
.

From my point of view If the quality of
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products
is
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good
, It will be better extant of selling than worthless things. Such as, The amount of the knowledge of
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products
were more than a third.
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But
this percentage was
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changed
to higher with
slowly
. That it to say percentage of knowledge of
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products
in 1997 became almost two fifths in 2006. Selling a thing was a quarter.
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Because of the fact that
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people
in 1997 years
were interested
in new things or
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products and
they
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bought
anything although what they were like.
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But
in 2006 the Mind of
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people
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improved and
they
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bought
things or
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products
which they need.

It is easy to understand if you advise more information about a thing which Customers or clients were going to
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buy
, it may bring that your customer to decide faster.
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So
in 1997 Advising and caring for customers were more than a third and that percentage was
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changed
to less than two fifths in 2006. It is
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clear
that
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People
in 1997 years were rich
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but
not all of them.
For instance
poor or average humans were
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very
a lot,
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so
sellers had to deal with them.
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Because
they had a
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little
money to
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buy
something, In 1997, Dealing with
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people
was three fifths,
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but
poor
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people
increased,
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so
in 2006 years this quantity became two thirds.
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IELTS academic The attitude of people on seal

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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