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The amount of food eaten by Chinese consumers

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The line graph illustrates the comparison of different food were utilized by every individual in each week from 1998 to 2010. The data has been calibrated in grams. overall, it is evident that the consumption of fish highest, whereas the utilization of meat lowest in china over the time period. It is observed from the line graph is that, in 1985, each person in every week ate 600 grams fish. subsequently, it inclined gradually and stood at 700 grams in 1990. 1990 onwords, it declined and reached at the same level as that in 1985. In the next given years, raising fluctuation was noticed in the amount. Eventually, it stood at over 800 grams in 2010. In the case of salt, in 1985, 490 grams salt was utilized by each person every week, whereas with the paasage of time, this amount followed a declining trend. In 2010, only 200 grams salt consumed by every individual within a week. probing further, the amount of meat which was intaken by per person weekly recorded at 100 grams in 1985. In the subsequent years, there was a considerable inclining and around at the same position as that of salt in 2010.
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ate 600
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, in 1985, 490
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in 1985. In the subsequent years, there was a considerable inclining and around at the same position as that of
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IELTS academic The amount of food eaten by Chinese consumers

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