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The advantages of older employee

The advantages of older employee JwjYB

First of all, the elderly workers have a strong sense of discipline, which means that they will be on time whenever their employer needs them. A part of the reason is that they do not want to get the boot at that age because it will be a challenge for them to seek a job, which has a decent salary to take care of their family, eventually, they will pull their socks up day by day. Moreover, mature workers who have more years of experience and knowledge also be a top priority for some companies, since the employee want to achieve their goals. People with hands-on experience will have a wide range of knowledge, which can be used to deal with some work problems. In a similar case, the number of souvenirs being produced in Japan sank dramatically in 2008, with the suggestions of the senior worker, that number doubled in 6 months

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