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temperature and sulight trends in three cities

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The chart represents the avergae monthly temperatures and total annual hours of sunlight per year in london, newyork and sydney. Overall, temperature in new york and london had the similar trend, yet new york was a bit warmer than london. Additionally, newyork recieved the most hours of sunlight cummulatively, whereas least sunlight hours were recorded in london. With upward trend beigining in march till july, plunging afterwards, newyork had the highest temperature, 30 degree celsius, in july for any city, But sydney temperature followed the completly opposite cycle, july being the coolest month with temperature falling to 16 degrees and than raising to 28 degrees in january. As far as for sunshine hours per year, new york and sydney garnered approximately similar numbers, 2530 and 2470, Unlike the other two cities london recived only 1780 hours of sunlight per year. Clearly, london is the coolest city, new york has the warmest summer, but sydeney enjoys the warm temprature overall.
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and total annual
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new york
was a bit warmer than
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london
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recieved
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cummulatively
, whereas least
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london
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had the highest
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sydney
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followed the
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opposite cycle,
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being the coolest month with
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falling to 16 degrees and
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january
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As far as for sunshine
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new york
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sydney
garnered approximately similar numbers, 2530 and 2470, Unlike the other two cities
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london
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