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task1 writing the table chart the percentage of sport people who aged 11-14 played in 2003

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The table chart compares the percentage type of sports humans aged 11-14 joined in 2003. Overall, it can be seen that most childrens took a period of time to attend different while rollerblading was the most preffered activity, snowboarding attracted least teenagers at the age of 11-14 in the same time. Looking at the figure of males, it is clear that skateboarding was greatest rank with 27. 5% in total of players. Athough the propotion of people spend time for mountain biking was 22, 7%, that of those for rollerblading was a bit lower with 21. 7%. Boys playing mountain climbing accouted for 10. 6%, which was higher than snowboarding with 8. 1% Turning into the females, rollerboarding was the favourite sport with 31. 7% humans, which was 2 times as much as the share of mountain biling and skateboarding with 13. 3%. The figure for girl participants who take part in mountain climbing and snowboarding made up 9. 3%, 4. 0% respectively.
The table chart compares the percentage type of sports humans aged 11-14
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joined
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Overall
, it can be
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seen
that most
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childrens
took a period of time to attend
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different
while rollerblading was the most
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preffered
activity, snowboarding attracted least
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teenagers
at the age of 11-14 in the same time.

Looking at the figure of males, it is
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clear
that skateboarding was
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greatest
rank with 27. 5% in total of players.
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Athough
the
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propotion
of
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people
spend time for
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mountain
biking was 22, 7%, that of those for rollerblading was a bit lower with 21. 7%. Boys playing
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mountain
climbing
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accouted
for 10. 6%, which was higher than snowboarding with 8. 1%

Turning into the females,
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rollerboarding
was the
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favourite
sport with 31. 7% humans, which was 2 times as much as the share of
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mountain
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biling
and skateboarding with 13. 3%. The figure for girl participants who
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take part
in
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mountain
climbing and snowboarding made up 9. 3%, 4. 0%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic task1 writing the table chart the percentage of sport people who aged 11-14 played in 2003

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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