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Task 1, the process of making cherry jam.

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The picture shows the complete process of making cherry jam production lines. The process is started by gathering cherries from the cherry tree and fishing them by labeling jam container in the factory by 9 main stages. First, cherries are by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree. Next, the cherries are collected and are transported by trucks. After that, cherries are sent into an automatic machine in order to remove the leaves and stems. Next, the washing process is done by machine, and they are moved on a ramp. In time, the stone is moved like a conveyor in order to remove the cherries. The next stage is cooking cherries in a giant port with extra ingredients added. Then checking the quality of the jam, the jars are filled with jam in an automated process. Finally, the jars have labels on them for all the goods.
The picture
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shows
the complete process of making cherry jam production lines.

The process is
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started
by gathering
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cherries
from the cherry tree and fishing them by labeling jam container in the factory by 9 main stages.

First
,
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cherries
are by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree.

Next
, the
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cherries
are collected
and
are transported
by trucks.

After that,
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cherries
are
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sent
into an automatic machine in order to remove the
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leaves
and stems.

Next
, the washing process
is done
by machine, and they are
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moved
on a ramp.

In time, the stone is
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moved
like a conveyor in order to remove the cherries.

The
next
stage is cooking
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cherries
in a giant port with extra ingredients
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added
.

Then checking the quality of the jam, the jars
are filled
with jam in an automated process.

Finally
, the jars have labels on them for all the
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goods
.

IELTS academic Task 1, the process of making cherry jam.

Academic
  American English
10 paragraphs
150 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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