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Global sales of mobile phone by brand in France between 2009 and ,2013

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The table gives information about how many mobile phone brands, namely Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG, ZTE were sold in millions around the world from 2009 to 2013. Overall, mobile phone brands, like Samsung, Apple, ZTE experienced a gradual rise in their numbers, while there was drop over 3 different years in Nokia and LG. In 2009, people were tend to buy mobile phone at the brand of Samsung at around 240 millions, demonstrating its the lowest rate among three given years. After then, it increased in both two years, 2011 and 2013, to nearly 310 and 440 millions respectively. Similarly, figures for Apple witnessed also a significant growth during the given years, from about 30 millions to over 100 millions sold. Following this the brand of ZTE is also seen as underwent a rise with only by nearly 2 millions between 2009 and 2013, reaching at approximately 70 millions of phones sold. Regarding to the other brands, global mobile phone sales by Nokia brand in 2009 illustrated its peak point over the given years together with categories with about 440 millions. Despite it there was a considerable decline to 2013 year with around 250 millions. Following this, 2009 to 2013 saw a steady decrease in the global sales of LG mobile phone, from just over 100 millions to around 90 millions accordingly.
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IELTS academic Global sales of mobile phone by brand in France between 2009 and, 2013

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