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Table show the family living in poverty in Australia in year 1999

Table show the family living in poverty in Australia in year 1999 1kyG7
The table illustrates the families living in poverty in Australia in 1999 and with the proportion of different categories. Overall the couple with children have the highest proportion of people and have less percentage solo parents had highest percentage but less people than the couple with children and single for no children. In the first three family types of single person, couple and single no children. The former had 6% with 54000 of people then the second aged couple had 48000 people with four percentage of proportion of people from each household. The latter had 19% with 359000 people. The role of household had total 1837000 people with 11 % who were lived in poverty. The 7% of the proportion was couple no children with 2 lakh 11000 people. That 232000 people were soul parents with the highest percentage which is 21 the percentage of couple with children was 12% and 933000 people from this household type.
The table illustrates the families living in poverty in Australia in 1999 and with the
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solo parents had
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. The former had 6% with 54000 of
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then the second aged
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had 48000
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from each household. The latter had 19% with 359000
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with 2 lakh 11000
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. That 232000
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