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Survey result of reasons for mobile usage

Survey result of reasons for mobile usage K2QM

The pie chart illustrates the outcome of surveys in one African country, in which teenager's were questioned the main reason for using their cell phone between 2016 and 2019. Overall, it can be seen that the social network accounted for maximum usage during the period. The usage of email and phone call among the teenager's considerably decreased, while digital camera usage substantially increased at the end of the period. In detail, social network usage was maximum among the teenager's from 2016 to 2017. In 2016, the usage of social network was half of all, and marginally decreased by 2% in 2017, than it again increased to 51% in 2018 and shows rise of 5% in 2019. In contrast the email usage was accounted for quarter in 2016, and decrease to 19% in 2019. Phone call usage shows fluctuation over the period. It was 10% in 2016, shows slight increase of 3% in 2017, than it falls to 11% in 2018, and finally shows significant decrease of 5% in 2019. On the other hand, digital camera usage remains same in 2016 and 2017 which was 15%. , than it rise to 18% in 2018, and shows marginal increase of 2% in 2019.

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