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In which age responsiblity should be given to young people

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The bar chart illustrates the survey's answers of adolescent people from five countries (USA, UK, Mexico, Japan, and Egypt) about the age young people could gain more control on life decisions as marriage, voting, and criminal responsibility. Adolescent people of Japan were agree that young people could have right to make different decisions only after passing 18 years old. All adolescents from other four countries agree that they can be responsible for making different decision at ages younger than 18 years old. USA young peopler believed that it is appropriate for older than 12 years old to be tried in a court for committing a crime while the age at which person can be tried is 15 in UK, Mexico and one year younger for Egyptian. The suitable age for making a marriage decision in USA and UK is 18 years old, while in Mexico and Egypt 16years old. In addition, the best age for young people to participate in political life by voting in Japan, USA is 22 and 18 years old respectively and for British, Mexican, and Egyptian it was slightly less than 18 years old. Overall, the survey showed variability in athe suitable age of young people to take control on their life decisions.
The bar chart illustrates the survey's answers of adolescent
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from five countries (USA, UK, Mexico, Japan, and Egypt) about the
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could gain more control on life
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as marriage, voting, and criminal responsibility.

Adolescent
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people
of Japan
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young
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people
could have right to
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different
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decisions
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after passing 18 years
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. All adolescents from other four countries
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agree
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at
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ages
younger than 18 years
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USA
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peopler
believed that it is appropriate for older than 12 years
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to
be tried
in a court for committing a crime while the
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at which person can
be tried
is 15 in UK, Mexico and one
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younger for Egyptian.

The suitable
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for making a marriage
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, while in Mexico and Egypt 16years
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to participate in political life by voting in Japan, USA is 22 and 18 years
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respectively
and for British, Mexican, and Egyptian it was
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IELTS academic In which age responsiblity should be given to young people

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207 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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