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Student numbers at local primary schools,2008?

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The given bar chart presents data about the amount of people who had studied in several schools which were situated locally in the year of 2008. Units are measured in numbers. Overall, it's clearly understandable from the illustration that St James school had the highest quantity of students among other local schools, whereas there were the fewest students in Bilsing school in 2008. Firstly, St James school had equal number of boys and girls. Their quantity was about 100. Just like that there was a equal amount of girls with boys in billsing school in 2008 conferring 35 in each one. It was nearly 30 students. Both Bilsing school and St James school had equal quantity of female students and male students. Secondly, Percival school had more boys than girls, however, in Roysters school there were more girls than boys showing 80 and 60. Royster school did not have as many girls as St James school girls. Percival school had around 20 more students compared to Roysters.
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bar chart presents data about the amount of
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people
who had studied in several
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schools
which
were situated
locally
in the year of 2008. Units
are measured
in numbers.

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, it's
clearly
understandable from the illustration that St James
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school
had the highest quantity of
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students
among other local
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schools
, whereas there were the fewest
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students
in
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Bilsing
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school
in 2008.

Firstly
, St James
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school
had equal number of
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boys
and
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girls
. Their quantity was about 100.
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like that there was
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a
equal amount of
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girls
with
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boys
in
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billsing
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school
in 2008 conferring 35 in each one. It was
nearly
30
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students
. Both
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Bilsing
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school
and St James
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school
had equal quantity of female
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students
and male students.

Secondly
, Percival
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school
had more
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boys
than
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girls
,
however
, in
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Roysters
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school
there were more
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girls
than
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boys
showing 80 and 60.
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Royster
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school
did not have as
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girls
as St James
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school
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girls
. Percival
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school
had around 20 more
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students
compared to
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Roysters
.
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