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steel rods are produced for furniture industry

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The diagram illustrates the way in which steel rods are produced for furniture industry. Overall, the process consists eleven stages, beginning with raw material and ended up with the product inspection. First of all, iron ore, yellow ore and carbon are collected to serve as a raw material for steel rod manufacturing. After that, the raw material is melted in a meting slit, where it is heated to a temperature in a range of 1300-1500 degree centigrade. The melted mass is then transferred to a smelting cabin to undergo refinement. Next, the condescent metal is put in a pouring machine and poured into ingots. In the next stage, the ingots are connected to cooling reservoir, where temperature falls to 60-100 degree centigrade. Metals goes through special nozzle where it cools down forming strands. Following this, the metal strands proceed to roller that change their shape. Next, the products are put into a heating machine, where they undergo heating treatment. Subsequently, a measuring automaton completes a surface check of product. After that, the melt rods are sized by special cutters and get ID stamping. Finally, the product undergo inspection and ready for use
The diagram illustrates the way in which steel rods
are produced
for furniture industry.
Overall
, the process consists eleven stages, beginning with raw material and ended up with the product inspection.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, iron ore, yellow ore and carbon
are collected
to serve as a raw material for steel rod manufacturing. After that, the raw material
is melted
in a meting slit, where it
is heated
to a temperature in a range of 1300-1500 degree centigrade. The melted mass is then transferred to a smelting cabin to undergo refinement.
Next
, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
condescent
metal
is put
in a pouring machine and poured into ingots.

In the
next
stage, the ingots
are connected
to cooling reservoir, where temperature falls to 60-100 degree centigrade.
Possible agreement error. You should probably use: "metal goes".
Metals goes
through special nozzle where it cools down forming strands. Following this, the metal strands proceed to roller that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
their shape.
Next
, the products
are put
into a heating machine, where they undergo heating treatment.
Subsequently
, a measuring automaton completes a surface
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
of product.

After that, the melt rods
are sized
by special cutters and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
ID stamping.
Finally
, the product undergo inspection and ready for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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IELTS academic steel rods are produced for furniture industry

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
191 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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