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some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. other ,however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required

some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. other, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required 0GB1

The percentage of Yemen and Italy's different ages of the population from 2000 to the prediction of their population in 2050 can be seen in the pie charts below. With a glance, the significant reduction of 0-14 years olds in Yemen, in 2050 would be realized. Besides, the increase in 60+ years olds in Italy during this period may get attention. Some information regarding these countries' ages of the population can be convinced from these pie charts. Firstly, a slight rise in the number of 60+ years old can be seen in Yemen. On the contrary, the number of 60+ years old will rocket in Italy. Secondly, the number of 15-59 years old will go up in Yemen while these ages would face a plunge in Italy. Finally, the numbers of 0-14 will drop in both countries, but in comparison, this dwindle would be more dramatic in Yemen. To sum up, it seems that both countries will face an older population instead of having more youngsters.

The percentage of Yemen and Italy's This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 ages of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsocietypopulacepeoplecommunityculturestate
population
 from 2000 to the prediction of their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsocietypopulacepeoplecommunityculturestate
population
 in 2050 can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 in the pie charts below. With a glance, the significant reduction of 0-14 years olds in Yemen, in 2050 would be realized
. Besides
, the increase in 60+ years olds in Italy during this period may This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 attention.

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Some
 information regarding these countries' ages of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsocietypopulacepeoplecommunityculturestate
population
 can be convinced
 from these pie charts. Firstly
, a slight rise in the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of 60+ years You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
 can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 in Yemen. On the contrary
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
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old
 will rocket in Italy. Secondly
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of 15-59 years You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
 will go up in Yemen while these ages would face a plunge in Italy. Finally
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
numbers
 of 0-14 will drop in both countries, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
in comparison
, The verb 'dwindle' is plural. Did you mean: "this dwindles"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?this dwindles
this dwindle
 would be more dramatic in Yemen.

To sum up, it seems that both countries will face an older You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsocietypopulacepeoplecommunityculturestate
population
instead
 of having more youngsters. 