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.Some people believe that having one world government would be better than having a national government .What are the advantage and disadvantage?

. Some people believe that having one world government would be better than having a national government. What are the advantage and disadvantage? 2a3AM
A vast majority of people claim that having a government in the worldwide; hence they can improve the quality of citizens life significantly rather than national state. While it also brings certain demerits such as they can face with several tough issues all over the world especially in laws communication. First and foremost, replacing by one world government may brings a loads of difficulty for worldwide. The authority cannot control tightly economics and attitudes of citizens all around the world. As we can seen that there are a loads of illegal activities such as drug trafficking or discharge chemical waste to environment. From that point, one authority may not ensure that they can enforce the law in person and intimidate them with the strictest punishments. In addition, each nation always inhibit various cultures and traditional heritages, since it could be impossible for the government to understand and communicate with the local regions all around the world. Moreover, the one State may bring some benefits to the world significantly. There would be no war to against with others nation in the future and it could be effortlessly to gain profitable and invest for citizens. There fore, residents in the world can live in peace of equality between other countries and also have a good quality of life. In conclusion, having one world authority could bring main vital benefits for the future but the negative consequences of removing nation governments should not be overlooked.
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claim that having a
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in the worldwide;
hence
they can
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improve
the quality of citizens life
significantly
rather
than national state. While it
also
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brings
certain demerits such as they can face with several tough issues all over the
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world
especially
in laws communication.

First
and foremost, replacing by one
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world
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government
may
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brings
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a loads
of difficulty for worldwide. The authority cannot control
tightly
economics and attitudes of citizens all around the
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world
. As we can
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seen
that there are
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a loads
of illegal activities such as drug trafficking or discharge chemical waste to environment. From that point, one authority may not ensure that they can enforce the law in person and intimidate them with the strictest punishments.
In addition
, each nation always inhibit various cultures and traditional heritages, since it could be impossible for the
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government
to understand and communicate with the local regions all around the world.

Moreover
, the one State may
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bring
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some
benefits to the
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world
significantly
. There would be no war to against with others nation in the future and it could be
effortlessly
to gain profitable and invest for citizens.
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There fore
, residents in the
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world
can
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live
in peace of equality between other countries and
also
have a
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good
quality of life.

In conclusion
, having one
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world
authority could
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bring
main vital benefits for the future
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but
the
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negative
consequences of removing nation
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governments
should not
be overlooked
.
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IELTS academic . Some people believe that having one world government would be better than having a national government. What are the advantage and disadvantage?

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