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The graph below show the amounts spent on apparel on the Internet in USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below show the amounts spent on apparel on the Internet in USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. ebx0K
The line graph provides information about money spent on the internet in the USA and Japan in the period of 1999 to 2003. Overall, the amount of money spent on apparel on the internet has an uptrend in both the USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003, although starting points of the two countries were not equal. In 1999, money used for online apparel in the USA was half of that in Japan. There was an increase in expenses on the Internet in both nations until 2000. The lowest points of the number were seen in Japan and the USA in 2001. In 2002, there was a dramatic raise in the both countries in money paid for online apparel and the USA and Japan reach to their peak value in 2003.
The line graph provides information about
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spent on the internet in the USA and
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Japan
in the period of 1999 to 2003.

Overall
, the amount of
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money
spent on apparel on the internet has an uptrend in both the USA and
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Japan
between 1999 and 2003, although starting points of the two countries were not equal.

In 1999,
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money
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used
for online apparel in the USA was half of that in
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Japan
. There was an increase in expenses on the Internet in both nations until 2000. The lowest points of the number were
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seen
in
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Japan
and the USA in 2001.

In 2002, there was a dramatic raise in the both countries in
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money
paid for online apparel and the USA and
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Japan
reach to their peak value in 2003.

IELTS academic The graph below show the amounts spent on apparel on the Internet in USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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4 paragraphs
131 words
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