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show the changes of the village park's map 10 years ago and now

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The two maps illustrate how the Village Park has developed for 10 years. It can be seen that the park underwent a lot, especially the size of each building and of some new constructions inside it. the tennis court has been enlarged 4 times to the south of the park. The car park’s capacity was just for 20 people’s vehicles but now it can accommodate up to 50 ones. Ten years ago, in the south west, there was just an empty land and now a picnic area has been built there. The football pitch after 10 years has been wider to the south than in the past. The woods in the south east was replaced by a toilet and a cafe. The children’s play area gave way to children’s park in the north and children’s softplay area. The park now has had cycle paths along the outside of the park.
The two maps illustrate how the Village
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has developed for 10 years. It can be
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seen
that the
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park
underwent a lot,
especially
the size of each building and of
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some
new constructions inside it.

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the
tennis court has
been enlarged
4 times to the south of the
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park
. The car
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park’s
capacity was
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just
for 20
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people
’s vehicles
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but
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now
it can accommodate up to 50 ones. Ten years ago, in the
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south west
, there was
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just
an empty land and
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now
a picnic area has
been built
there.

The football pitch after 10 years has been wider to the south than in the past. The woods in the
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south east
was replaced
by a toilet and a
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cafe
.
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The
children’s play area gave way to children’s
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in the north and children’s
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softplay
area.
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The
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park
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now
has had cycle paths along the outside of the
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park
.

IELTS academic show the changes of the village park's map 10 years ago and now

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