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The graph shows different symptoms of depression among 12th grade students in the united states in the years 1982 through 2012, expressed in millions of occurrences.

The graph shows different symptoms of depression among 12th grade students in the united states in the years 1982 through 2012, expressed in millions of occurrences. DqYxk
The given line graph illustrates the somatic symptoms of depression among 12th grade pupils in the USA from 1982 to 2012. In general, it can be seen that, all the symptoms rates showing an increasing trend in the given time period. In 1982, around 1. 4 millions of students suffered shortness of breath as the least symptom of depression and in 2012, it records 1. 6 million. Although, students suffering from sleeping symptom records the highest among all the other health issues, which consists of 2. 5 million. Even it has a fluctuating tendency it remains the major symptom of depression throughout the given time period. At the end of 2012, it records nearly 2. 8 millions. An amount of 2. 2 million students faced issues in thinking and concentrating in 1982, which marks the second highest depression symptom. However, both the symptom of remembering and learning shows a fluctuating trend in the years 1982 and 1984. Initially, the learning capability of 1. 7 million students were losing in the year 1982, which then showed a decreasing trend in the coming yearscompared to pupils who suffered from memory loss. As an overview, most of the students encountered higher sleeping symptoms as a cause of depression, whereas shortness of breath accounts the least in the given time period.
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of depression among 12th grade pupils in the USA from 1982 to 2012.
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rates showing an increasing trend in the
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of
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suffered shortness of breath as the least
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of depression and in 2012, it records 1. 6
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. Although,
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suffering from sleeping
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records the highest among all the other health issues, which consists of 2. 5
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. Even it has a fluctuating tendency it remains the major
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of depression throughout the
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of 2012, it records
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. An amount of 2. 2
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faced issues in thinking and concentrating in 1982, which marks the second highest depression symptom.

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of remembering and learning
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a fluctuating trend in the years 1982 and 1984.
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were losing in the year 1982, which then
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encountered higher sleeping
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as a cause of depression, whereas shortness of breath accounts the least in the
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IELTS academic The graph shows different symptoms of depression among 12th grade students in the united states in the years 1982 through 2012, expressed in millions of occurrences.

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