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rates of birth and death in New Zealand during the period between 1901 till 2101.

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The line graph illustrates the rates of birth and death in New Zealand during the period between 1901 till 2101. Overall, the birth rate has been much higher from the death rate from 1901 to the present 2021. Whereas it is forecasted that the death rate will be much higher than the rate of the birth in next decades. The birth rate increased significantly from 1901 at 20000 new-borns and it reached a peak of around 65000 in 1961 before fluctuated from 1961 to 2021. The birth rate is predicted to decline gradually with minor fluctuations from 2021 to 2101. As for the death rate, it kept fluctuating between 1901 and 2001. After 2001 the death rate increased rapidly from 25000 death in 2001 to 49000 in 2021, and it is forecasted to reach a peak rate at 60, 000 in 2061 before dropping slightly in the next 40 years.
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and death in New Zealand during the period between 1901 till 2101.

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from 1901 to the present 2021.

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and it reached a peak of around 65000 in 1961
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fluctuated from 1961 to 2021. The
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is predicted
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with minor fluctuations from 2021 to 2101.

As for the death
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IELTS academic rates of birth and death in New Zealand during the period between 1901 till 2101.

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