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more and more university students only focus on studying and forget other activities

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Nowadays, more and more university students only focus on studying and forget other activities. Personally, I believe that students should spend time joining other activities. The first reason for this is that university students should join a lot of other activities so it can make students more active. And then, students can make many new friends easily when they take part in other activities. For example, In Vietnam, most students have summer vacation time they often participate in other sports activities such as soccer, badminton and swimming. Another compelling reason is that students should take part in social activities like volunteer activities. Additionally, students become friends with people and they feel comfortable after class. For example, when students join activities they will acquire knowledge and experience many new things better. However, their main attention should be on education. In conclusion, I believe that students at university should not focus completely on studying they should participate in other activities.

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