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rate of unemployment in rural as well as urban areas

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The line graph represents the unemployment rate of Australia in rural as well as urban areas in the year 2012 which is divided into four different quarters namely, first, second, third, fourth. At first sight, we see the proportion of unemployed persons in rural areas is greater when compared with those of urban areas in all four quarters and the unemployment rate does not remain constant in any part of the year since the proportion sometimes is on an increase and sometimes it decreases gradually. Putting differently, the rate of person out-of-job in rural areas is maximum in first three months of the year with 6% whereas in urban areas its rate reaches the utmost to approximately 4% only in the second quarter but the minimum proportion of rural areas is 5% particularly in the second quarter and in urban areas, it is almost 2% which is quite lower than the rural areas. On the whole, we can say that the rate of unemployment is higher in rural areas than in urban areas and this may be because of the population in rural is greater than in urban.
The line graph represents the unemployment
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of Australia in
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as well
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urban
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areas
in the year 2012 which
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into four
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quarters
namely
,
first
, second, third, fourth.

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first
sight, we
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the proportion of unemployed persons in
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rural
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areas
is greater when compared with those of
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urban
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areas
in all four
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quarters
and the unemployment
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rate
does not remain constant in any part of the year since the proportion
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sometimes
is on an increase and
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sometimes
it decreases
gradually
.

Putting
differently
, the
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rate
of person out-of-job in
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rural
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areas
is maximum in
first
three months of the year with 6% whereas in
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urban
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areas
its
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reaches the utmost to approximately 4%
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in the second
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but
the minimum proportion of
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rural
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areas
is 5%
particularly
in the second
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quarter
and in
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urban
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areas
, it is almost 2% which is quite lower than the
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rural
areas.

On the whole
, we can say that the
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rate
of unemployment is higher in
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rural
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areas
than in
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urban
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areas
and this may be
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of the population in
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is greater than in
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urban
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IELTS academic rate of unemployment in rural as well as urban areas

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6.5
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