Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Raman ko apne fees bta di. Agr wo class k liye willing hai. She has to send fee in advance .....

The 2 bar chart represents total amount of computer holders as a percentage and owner of computer by education class respectively for an eight-year period. Overall, the number of computers owned slightly increased from 2002 to 2010. In the same manner, computer ownership vs education level also saw an upward trend. In the beginning for computer ownership, for the eight years, the trend for keeping a computer started and consequently, after every two years, a slight growth is seen. As a result of this, from 2002 to 2010, computer ownership growth was increased by approximately twenty-five percent. On the same note, comparing education level by ownership, as the latter saw growth, so does the former. For school and college going children, computer ownership is ahead by almost fifty percent for years 2002 to 2010. Although, for degree holders and post-graduate students, the number of computer owned definitely grew but very slightly. For these two categories, the gradual increase was recorded as twenty percent.
The 2 bar chart represents total amount of computer holders as a percentage and owner of computer by education
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
respectively
for an eight-year period.

Overall
, the number of computers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
slightly
increased from 2002 to 2010. In the same manner, computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
vs education level
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
an upward trend.

In the beginning for computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
, for the eight years, the trend for keeping a computer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
and
consequently
, after every two years, a slight growth is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
.
As a result
of this, from 2002 to 2010, computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
growth
was increased
by approximately twenty-five percent.

On the same note, comparing education level by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
, as the latter
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
growth,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
does the former. For school and college going children, computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ownership
is ahead by almost fifty percent for years 2002 to 2010. Although, for degree holders and post-graduate students, the number of computer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
definitely grew
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
slightly
. For these two categories, the gradual increase
was recorded
as twenty percent.

IELTS academic Raman ko apne fees bta di. Agr wo class k liye willing hai. She has to send fee in advance. . . . .

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Raman ko apne fees bta di. Agr wo class k liye willing hai. She has to send fee in advance .....