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Queen Mary Hospital in the years 1960,1980,2000

Queen Mary Hospital in the years 1960, 1980, 2000 q00Yr

The diagrams illustrate a variety of alterations in the Queen Mary Hospital in 1980 and 2000, since it was built in the year 1960. Looking from an overall perspective, it is conspicuous that there were a spectacular developments, except the main building of the hospital other buildings were demolished, some of them were modernized. As can be seen when it was erected there was a shopping centre which had been demolished to make a way for two new blocks: Cancer center and pharmacy. It should be noted that the health center and pharmacy remained relatively the same in the past 4 decades. Furthermore, the farmland was converted into a nursing school. In addition, the car park, located nearby the clinic and that remained stable in the 1960s and 1980s, nevertheless, was reduced in size by the 2000s. Moreover, it is apparently seen that the cancer center extended to cover entire nursing school in the year 2000

The diagrams illustrate a variety of alterations in the Queen Mary Hospital in 1980 and 2000, since it was built
 in the year 1960.

Looking from an overall
 perspective, it is conspicuous that there were a spectacular Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "development"?development
developments
, except the main building of the hospital other buildings were demolished
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 of them were modernized
.

As can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 when it was erected
 there was a shopping Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 which had been demolished
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 a way for two new blocks: Cancer center and pharmacy. It should be noted
 that the health center and pharmacy remained relatively
 the same in the past 4 decades.

Furthermore
, the farmland was converted
 into a nursing school. In addition
, the car park, located nearby the clinic and that remained stable in the 1960s and 1980s, nevertheless
, was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviated
reduced
 in size by the 2000s. Moreover
, it is apparently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that the cancer center extended to cover entire nursing school in the year 2000