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Proportion of male and female arrests by offence type, 2008/0

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The information given in the graph makes comparisons in the rate of genders who arrested by eight different crime kinds in September in 2008. While the figure for offence type over the par chart show, there are three kinds of crime that have the percentage of women higher than that of men, whereas the remaining offender types vice versa. Looking at the detail, it is considerable that violence against the person made up the highest proportion in total both males and females, roughly 33% and 31% respectively. The ratio crime of theft and handling stolen goods were ranked second with 32% women arrested, approximately third-second compared to that of men arrested. Fraud and forgery had the proportion offence low, which had the percentage of women arrested were 3% slightly larger that of man. On the contrary, Bobbery was the lowest proportion people arrested as well as the least serious. With Burglary, the ratio of man arrested were twice as high as that of women, simultaneously, it also as high as that of Drug offences, roundly 7%. Criminal damage had the rate of female offender that higher than male, with 10% and 7% respectively. Finally, other offences accounted for 15% female arrested higher than male.
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comparisons in the rate of genders who
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arrested
by eight
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different
crime kinds in September in 2008.

While the figure for
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offence
type over the par chart
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show
, there are three kinds of crime that have the percentage of
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women
higher than that of
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men
, whereas the remaining offender types vice versa.

Looking at the detail, it is considerable that violence against the person made up the highest proportion in total both males and females, roughly 33% and 31%
respectively
. The ratio crime of theft and handling stolen
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goods
were ranked
second with 32%
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women
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arrested
, approximately third-second compared to that of
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men
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arrested
. Fraud and forgery had the proportion
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offence
low, which had the percentage of
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women
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arrested
were 3%
slightly
larger that of
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man
.

On the contrary
,
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Bobbery
was the lowest proportion
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people
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arrested
as well
as the least serious. With Burglary, the ratio of
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man
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arrested
were twice as high as that of
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women
,
simultaneously
, it
also
as high as that of Drug
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offences
,
roundly
7%. Criminal damage had the rate of female offender that higher than male, with 10% and 7%
respectively
.

Finally
, other
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offences
accounted for 15% female
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arrested
higher than male.
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