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The line graph illustrates the change in the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office (TIO) in a major city over a six month period. Here, people communicated to the TIO in three modes (in person, by letter/email, by telephone). At the beginning of the year, citizens were used to communicating via telephone whereas getting information by visiting personally became popular in the month of June. However, letter/ email became the least popular medium of communication at the end of the period. According to the graph, the frequency of getting information by visiting in person increased gradually in the first three months and having a sharp increase makes it up to the top (approximately 1900 in June). On the other hand, the frequency of receiving nearly 800 letters/emails (in January) has a gradual decrease made it the least popular medium of communication in June (less than 400). Although starting with the highest frequency in January (around 900), experiencing ups and downs telephonic conversation became the second popular way of communication for getting information.
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enquiries
received by the Tourist
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Office (
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TIO
) in a major city over a
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six month
period. Here,
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people
communicated to the
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TIO
in three modes (in person, by letter/email, by telephone).

At the beginning of the year, citizens were
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used
to communicating via telephone whereas getting
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information
by visiting
personally
became
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popular
in the month of June.
However
, letter/ email became the least
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popular
medium of communication at the
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end
of the period.

According to the graph, the frequency of getting
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information
by visiting in person increased
gradually
in the
first
three months and having a sharp increase
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makes
it up to the top (approximately 1900 in June).
On the other hand
, the frequency of receiving
nearly
800 letters/emails (in January) has a gradual decrease made it the least
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popular
medium of communication in June (less than 400).

Although starting with the highest frequency in January (around 900), experiencing ups and downs telephonic conversation became the second
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popular
way of communication for getting
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information
.
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IELTS academic enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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