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Process description. Description of production of Electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion

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The diagram demonstrates the stages in the process of working a system which is called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion. The seawater below 1000 meters is cold and has a temperature of about5 degrees celsius. The seawater above 1000 meters is warm and has a temperature of about 29 degrees. Firstly, the warm seawater on the surface enters to evacuated evaporation chamber where the seawater is evaporated by solar energy forming water vapor. During the evaporation, the salt is removed and falls down. Afterwards, the saltless water vapor is sent to the turbine where the vapor turns creating electricity. Next, the hot vapor is sent to the condensing chamber and the vapor coming from the turbine is cooled by cold water from the deep layers of the ocean and the process of condensation is taken place. After condensing, the vapor turns into liquid water which is used for drinking.
The diagram demonstrates the stages in the process of working a system which
is called
Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion. The seawater below 1000 meters is
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cold
and has a temperature of about5 degrees
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celsius
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The
seawater above 1000 meters is warm and has a temperature of about 29 degrees.
Firstly
, the warm seawater on the surface enters to evacuated evaporation chamber where the seawater
is evaporated
by solar energy forming
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water
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vapor
. During the evaporation, the salt
is removed
and falls down. Afterwards, the
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saltless
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water
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vapor
is
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sent
to the turbine where the
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vapor
turns creating electricity.
Next
, the hot
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vapor
is
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sent
to the condensing chamber and the
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vapor
coming from the turbine
is cooled
by
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cold
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water
from the deep layers of the ocean and the process of condensation
is taken
place. After condensing, the
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vapor
turns into liquid
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water
which is
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used
for drinking.
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IELTS academic Process description. Description of production of Electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion

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