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Population Disturbution in 1915 and 2015

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These pie charts illustrate where the population in the United Kingdom lived in 1915 and 2015. There is also a significant change in these two centuries. Nowadays, people tend to move in the metropolis. In 1915, most of the population in the United Kingdom lived in the rural area, which is sixty percent of the pie chart. Only forty percent does not live in the countryside of the country. While thirty percent of population live in the urban area, the minority of the populations live in the suburban area. However there was a fascinating change in the 21th century. Half of the chart move into cities, while forty percent of population live in the suburban area. Rural area become the least residence in 2015. From this shift, I believe that people in the United Kingdom will stay more in the cities. Overall, the charts show differences of living area in the united kingdom.
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IELTS academic Population Disturbution in 1915 and 2015

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6.0
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