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personal statement about chemistry

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I chose chemistry because I have a passion for studying chemicals and how to deal with them. My presence in the school laboratory was happiness for me, as I love exploring new things and doing chemical explorations. What interest me is that chemistry is one related subject for our life. It is in the medicine, clothes and others. Also, it may help keep me safe I will understand this life how is going. In addition, it will teach me lots of skills like making decisions, as well as it will help me to know about the current events. I am very accurate, as this trait will help me when entering the laboratory and dealing with chemicals. I also love exploration, adventure and looking at everything new, and this is what will prompt me to inquire about everything related to chemistry and laboratories. fnally, I am into the challenge and getting something wrong in Chemistry is seen as a chance, not a mistake therefore it encourages me to keep going. I have studied chemistry as a separate subject for two years in secondary school. And in the last year in school I have got an excellent grade which let me to study this subject abroad. Through my studies in school, I have acquired many skills of cooperation, teamwork and assistance. I also participated in many school events and competitions. I had participated in many competitions for knowledge development in mathematics and chemistry. I also participated in many industrial robot and chemical experiments groups. I want to be in the future a chemist working in one of the laboratory in my country. well I will use social responsibility and my knowledge to work hard and contribute with my workmates.
I chose
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chemistry
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because
I have a passion for studying chemicals and how to deal with them.

My presence in the
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school
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laboratory
was happiness for me, as I
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love
exploring new things and

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doing
chemical explorations.

What interest me is that
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chemistry
is one related subject for our life. It is in the medicine,
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clothes


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and
others.
Also
, it may
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help
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keep
me safe I will understand this life how is going.
In addition
,
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it


will teach me lots of
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skills
like making decisions,
as well
as it will
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help
me to know about the

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current
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events
.

I am
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very
accurate, as this trait will
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help
me when entering the
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laboratory
and dealing with

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chemicals
. I
also
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love
exploration, adventure and looking at everything new, and this is what
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will


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prompt
me to inquire about everything related to
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chemistry
and
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laboratories
.
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fnally
, I am into the

challenge and getting something
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wrong
in
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Chemistry
is
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seen
as a chance, not a mistake

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therefore
it encourages me to
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keep
going.

I have studied
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chemistry
as a separate subject for two years in secondary
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school
. And in the
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last


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year
in
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school
I have
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got
an excellent grade which
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let
me to study this subject abroad.

Through my studies in
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school
, I have acquired
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many
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skills
of cooperation, teamwork and

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assistance
. I
also
participated in
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many
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school
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events
and competitions. I had participated
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in


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many
competitions for knowledge development in mathematics and
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chemistry
. I
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also


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participated
in
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many
industrial robot and chemical experiments groups.

I want to be in the future a chemist working in one of the
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laboratory
in my country.
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well
I will
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use


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social
responsibility and my knowledge to work
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hard
and contribute with my workmates.

IELTS academic personal statement about chemistry

Academic
  American English
20 paragraphs
287 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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