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percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 0Oy1

1 The bar chart demonstrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. When analyzing the given data, it has a rapid decreasing trend in first three age limits in Male but there after it increases gradually till age limit 55 to 64 and has gone down in age limit 65 and over. As a comparison, it can be mentioned that Female engages activities than male

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 groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. When analyzing the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
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 data, it has a rapid decreasing trend in first
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age
 limits in Male This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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there after
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 limit 55 to 64 and has gone down in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyouthmaturitylifeold age
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