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People uses transportation in different way

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This is a line graph which describes the changes in the way of people using transports. On the x-axis the period between 1990 to 2000, On the Y-axis the transport that was used, as seen huge amount of people used to use the bicycle which was pretty common at this time to arrive in different places specially the school. But now people are intending use bus instead, due to the fact bus is much easier for them. Despite the bus being so much crowded, people also not caring sometimes. They wake up early and try to catch the bus as early as possible. This is a number of problem for aged people sometimes, in light of the fact that they are mature they can't run can't do things faster as it was in the past, regardless of how the bus troublesome is, busses has been so much in use too, because it is some transport that manages to take numerous people from one place to another, usually number of the seats in a bus is 50, means that there are 50 persons at least in the bus. A number of people who are late usually not finding seats consequently they turn on standing in the bus. Consequently, the bus is usually solving problems there. On the contrary I would recommend walking or getting a bicycle, owing to the fact that bicycles are consequently much good in case of the sport terms. Consequently I would always suggest people to walk or use bicycles when the place is not consequently much far let's say 500 meters away from home would be great for walking. If the place you are heading further than your place, take the bus you are not going to walk like more than 500 meters though. It's pretty exhausting and pretty illogical.
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IELTS academic People uses transportation in different way

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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