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The bar chart compares the percentage of students proficient in a foreign language

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The bar chart compares the percentage of students proficient foreign languages. Overall, it can be seen that Romania, India and Vietnam were higher than other. In contrast China, Tailand and Russia were than other. And number of females higher than males. Percentage of females 64 %and Males were 42%in Romania. And similar them India percentage of females were 64% and males 65% they were higher than others. However Vietnam was female 65% and males 39percent. In contrast small lines were China, Tailand and Russia, for example percentage of females were 30% and males 16% in China. And similar them Tailand was perfect of females 26% Male was 30%. And Russia was percentage of females 42% and males were 35%
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