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The traditional family mealtime is indeed becoming a thing of the past.

The traditional family mealtime is indeed becoming a thing of the past. Ll2oG
The traditional family mealtime is indeed becoming a thing of the past. There are some reasons which can explain this changing pattern of behaviour, and there are significant impacts on family life and health. There are two obvious reasons why families no longer share mealtimes as they used to do in the past. Firstly, children are often too impatient to eat at the table, and parents sometimes allow them to have their meal in front of the TV or sitting in front of the computer. Secondly, the close-knit family is disappearing in the face of economic pressures. In single-parent households or families with working mothers, it can be almost impossible to arrange regular times for meals when all the family is together. The consequences for family life and children’s health are dire. From the perspective of the family, meals taken together are a critical feature of a stable family background. This stability of family routine is an essential factor in shaping children’s personality during their formative years. Family mealtimes are a time to share news, give guidance and to make plans together. In terms of children’s health, family meals were an opportunity to provide all the family members with a healthier diet, based on wholesome home-made food. Without this routine, children are sometimes left to have snacks, or eat junk food at fast-food chains. Health consequences such as obesity and hyperactivity often result when youngsters fail to eat a balanced diet, such as used to be provided at family mealtimes. In conclusion, some reasons can be identified for the decline in shared family meals, and the impacts are overwhelmingly negative.
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, and there are significant impacts on
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life and health.

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no longer share mealtimes as they
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to do in the past.
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too impatient to eat at the table, and parents
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in front of the TV or sitting in front of the computer.
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, the close-knit
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is disappearing in the face of economic pressures. In single-parent households or
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with working mothers, it can be almost impossible to arrange regular times for
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meals
when all the
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is together.

The consequences for
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life and
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health are dire. From the perspective of the
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,
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meals
taken together are a critical feature of a stable
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background. This stability of
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routine is an essential factor in shaping
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children’s
personality during their formative years.
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mealtimes are a time to share news, give guidance and to
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plans together. In terms of
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health,
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were an opportunity to provide all the
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members with a healthier diet, based on wholesome home-made food. Without this routine,
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sometimes
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-food chains. Health consequences such as obesity and hyperactivity
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result when youngsters fail to eat a balanced diet, such as
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mealtimes.

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IELTS academic The traditional family mealtime is indeed becoming a thing of the past.

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