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People nowadays work hard to buy more material things by forgetting traditional values. To what' extent do you agree or disagree to this statement

People nowadays work hard to buy more material things by forgetting traditional values. To what' extent Lwqp8
Often argued and frequently being discussed the diplomatic issue of money hiking by people for purchasing considerable amount of things which might be reason for delightful life but it also overlooks many traditional values. The same has turned the spotlight in it of being it certain or uncertain as an ongoing trend. Rather than slinking away having a close discussion about working hard for buying more things is necessary for living a comfortable life nowadays and how it directly affects to some traditional values and norms. Firstly talking like a wise man, speaking a loud one of the most controversial issues hard work of people to buy more things because they want to impress other people's by their achievements or to be in a race of being bigger in terms of living standards in society. Clearing the appearance with a survey conducted by the University of Hanoi in 2014 showed that 70% nation want to earn money for materialism. This fact may well illustrate importance of money for materialism. Moreover, remembering to cross out the same, people need more fund to afford advance technology gajects in order to live comfortable life in current scenario. Emphesizing moreover about by illustrating a campaign being lead by in the United Kingdom for showing various ways to improve their stand in their career to people who can do hard work. hence even though being buzy and tired people choose to do hard work in order to earn more funds to buy things. On the contrary, turning head towards the darker side people are loosing some traditional norms by accepting the morden technology, and they are not having much time for their near & dear ones due to their busy schedule. Eloborating the narrated content with a pear reviewed article the well known speaker sad guru stated that nowadays most people are having their meal by sitting in dinning table and which effect negatively, he supported the traditional system if sitting crossed legs while having meal instead in one of his speak for the public such a misleading emptiness of knowledge for cultural value many results in several health issues. In my aquetnce the whole point of an essay is to express my balanced view over the scenario of people working hard nowadays to buy more things is have to move with time & society, nevertheless it also damaged to some culture also.
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being discussed
the diplomatic issue of money hiking by
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people
for purchasing considerable amount of things which might be reason for delightful life
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but
it
also
overlooks
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many
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traditional
values. The same has turned the spotlight in it of being it certain or uncertain as an ongoing trend.
Rather
than slinking away
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having
a close discussion about working
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hard
for buying more things is necessary for living a comfortable life nowadays and how it
directly
affects to
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some
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traditional
values and norms.

Firstly
talking like a wise
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man
, speaking a loud one of the most controversial issues
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hard
work of
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people
to
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buy
more things
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because
they want to impress other
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people
's by their achievements or to be in a race of being bigger in terms of living standards in society. Clearing the appearance with a survey conducted by the University of Hanoi in 2014
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showed
that 70% nation want to earn money for materialism. This fact may well illustrate importance of money for materialism.

Moreover
, remembering to cross out the same,
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people
need more fund to afford advance technology
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gajects
in order to
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live
comfortable life in
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current
scenario.
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moreover
about by illustrating a campaign being lead by in the United Kingdom for showing various ways to
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improve
their stand in their career to
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people
who can do
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hard
work.
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hence
even though
being
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buzy
and tired
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people
choose to do
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hard
work in order to earn more funds to
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buy
things.
On the contrary
, turning head towards the darker side
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people
are loosing
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some
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traditional
norms by accepting the
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morden
technology, and they are not
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having
much time for their near & dear ones due to their busy schedule.
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Eloborating
the narrated content with a pear reviewed article the well known speaker sad guru stated that nowadays most
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people
are
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having
their meal by sitting in dinning table and which effect
negatively
, he supported the
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traditional
system if sitting crossed legs while
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having
meal
instead
in one of his speak for the public such a misleading emptiness of knowledge for cultural value
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many
results in several health issues. In my
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aquetnce
the whole point of an essay is to express my balanced view over the scenario of
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people
working
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hard
nowadays to
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buy
more things is
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have
to
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move
with time & society,
nevertheless
it
also
damaged to
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some
culture
also
.

IELTS academic People nowadays work hard to buy more material things by forgetting traditional values. To what' extent

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