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Participation in different cultural activities in Scotland in the past year.

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The following table gives information about the participation rate of 6800 Scottish 16 years or older natives in various cultural activities in the last 12 months based on a survey. Overall, young adults were the most active in terms of participation in cultural activities. They reached the highest engagement in four out of the six separated categories. Furthermore the 16-24 age group also achived the highest ratio in any of the categories, with more than one third of them taking part in cultural performances, which of course is not suprising given that this was also the most popular hobby for all ages. Looking at this table, it can also be seen that all of the ratios are decreasing or increasing gradually between the different age groups. Consequently the lowest percentages were registered in the oldest age group, where only one in every twentieth member would perform writing or computer based activities. However, involvement in visual arts seemed to be the most dissimilar. 30% of young adults took part in the prevously mentioned activity, while only 11 percent of the eldest category could say the same, which results in an almost 20 percent difference. Overall good – use some more numerical data Peti.
The following table gives information about the participation rate of 6800 Scottish 16 years or older natives in various cultural
activities
in the last 12 months based on a survey.

Overall
, young adults were the most active in terms of participation in cultural
activities
. They reached the highest engagement in four out of the six separated categories.
Furthermore
the 16-24 age group
also
achived
the highest ratio in any of the categories, with more than one third of them taking part in cultural performances, which
of course
is not
suprising
given
that this was
also
the most popular hobby for all ages.

Looking at this table, it can
also
be
seen
that
all of the
ratios are decreasing or increasing
gradually
between the
different
age groups.
Consequently
the lowest percentages
were registered
in the oldest age group, where
only
one in every twentieth member would perform writing or computer based
activities
.
However
, involvement in visual arts seemed to be the most dissimilar. 30% of young adults
took part
in the
prevously
mentioned
activity
, while
only
11 percent of the eldest category could say the same, which results in an almost 20 percent difference.

Overall
good
use
some
more numerical data
Peti
.
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IELTS academic Participation in different cultural activities in Scotland in the past year.

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6.0
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