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ow many people went to watch the variety of live sport matches from 2005 to 2015.

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The information provided in the bar chart is concerning how many people went to watch the variety of live sport matches from 2005 to 2015. Overall, it can be seen clearly that the majority of watching live matches was football whereas swimming was the least favored sports event during the given period. According to the data, the population’s preference in cycling and golf registered downward trends throughout the period. The percentage of sport watchers increased from nearly 13% to 16% in the first 5 years, before hitting the lowest at 11% however this figure ranked the second in the list. The latter underwent a slight decrease from 4% in 2005 to 3% in 2010 which shared an equal figure for 2015. The rest of types of sport were witness a rose. The modest 2% of watchers in swimming over a first decade of period, followed by a slight growth of 3% in 2015. In addition, the proportion of watching tennis underwent a considerable fluctuation, starting at 13% in 2005, the number of watchers went up by approximately 4% over the next decades. Finally, the percentage of people watching football and basketball have the same patterns which steadily increase over each period, to be precise, from exactly 20% to 24% in the former and 8% to 10% in the latter.
The information provided in the bar chart
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people
went to
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watch
the variety of
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sport
matches from 2005 to 2015.

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seen
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that the majority of watching
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live
matches was football whereas swimming was the least favored
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sports
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event
during the
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period.

According to the data, the population’s preference in cycling and golf registered downward trends throughout the period. The percentage of
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sport
watchers increased from
nearly
13% to 16% in the
first
5 years,
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before
hitting the lowest at 11%
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this figure ranked the second in the list. The latter underwent a slight decrease from 4% in 2005 to 3% in 2010 which shared an equal figure for 2015.

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The
rest of types of
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sport
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witness a rose.
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The
modest 2% of watchers in swimming over a
first
decade of period, followed by a slight growth of 3% in 2015.
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, the proportion of watching tennis underwent a considerable fluctuation, starting at 13% in 2005, the number of watchers went up by approximately 4% over the
next
decades.
Finally
, the percentage of
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people
watching football and basketball have the same patterns which
steadily
increase over each period, to be precise, from exactly 20% to 24% in the former and 8% to 10% in the latter.
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IELTS academic ow many people went to watch the variety of live sport matches from 2005 to 2015.

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