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Overpopulation in urban areas leads to numerous problem. Write it's causes and solutions

Overpopulation in urban areas leads to numerous problem. Write it's causes and solutions kLGGe
To start with, Rapidly increasing population in cities leads to lots of problems. First of all, Because of the lots of vehicle on the road creating massive congestion which responsible for the accidents and delaying commute to workplace. Secondly, "Cut throat competition", there are limited jobs available in the cities which leads to unemployment and most of the people are trying to achieve these job but not able to tackle. To recommended some ways by which government can solve this problem by spreading awareness among people to prefer public transport rather then personal car(vehicle). Which can control the environmental pollution as well as reduce the traffic in the cities. In addition government should increase job opportunity else people become self employed and allocate job to others. To identify, the solution should implement to overcome the problems which are being happening like traffic and unemployment.
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increasing population in cities leads to lots of problems.
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of the
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lots of vehicle
on the road creating massive congestion which responsible for the accidents and delaying commute to workplace.
Secondly
,
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Cut throat
competition
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are limited
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jobs
available in the cities which leads to unemployment and most of the
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people
are trying to achieve these
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job
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but
not able to tackle.
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To recommended
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some
ways by which
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government
can solve this problem by spreading awareness among
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people
to prefer public transport
rather
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then
personal car(vehicle). Which can control the environmental pollution
as well
as
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reduce
the traffic in the cities. In
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addition
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government
should increase
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job
opportunity else
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people
become
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self employed
and allocate
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job
to others. To identify, the solution should implement to overcome the problems which are being happening like traffic and unemployment.
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IELTS academic Overpopulation in urban areas leads to numerous problem. Write it's causes and solutions

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  American English
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