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The chart shows how many male and female students were studying full-time or part-time in further education in Britain between 1970/71 and 1990/91. Overall, the vast majority of students were part-time and there were more students in 1990/91 than in 1970/71, especially women. Looking firstly at part-time versus full-time study, it is clear that most students were part-time in each year shown in the chart. The number of part-time students was over 700, 000 per gender per year, going as high as 1. 1 million, whereas for full-time study the number was between 70, 000 and 250, 000. Moving on to look at gender differences, numbers of female students increased in both full-time and part-time education whereas the number of males in part-time education decreased. For example, there were 70, 000 full-time and about 750, 000 part-time female students in 1970/71, but by 1990/91 these numbers had risen to over 200, 000 full-time and around 1. 1 million part-time. The number of male full-time students also went up from around 100, 000 in 1970/71 to over 200, 000 in 1990/91, whereas for part-time study their numbers went down from 1 million in 1970/71 to around 850, 000 in 1980/81, before rising slightly to about 900, 000 in 1990/91.
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male and female
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were studying full-time or part-time in
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education in Britain between 1970/71 and 1990/91.
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, the vast majority of
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were part-time and there were more
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in 1990/91 than in 1970/71,
especially
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Looking
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at part-time versus full-time study, it is
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that most
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were part-time in each year shown in the chart. The
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of part-time
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students
was over 700, 000 per gender per year, going as high as 1. 1 million, whereas for full-time study the
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was between 70, 000 and 250, 000.

Moving on to look at gender differences,
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numbers
of female
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students
increased in both full-time and part-time education whereas the
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of males in part-time education decreased.
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, there were 70, 000 full-time and about 750, 000 part-time female
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students
in 1970/71,
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by 1990/91 these
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had risen to over 200, 000 full-time and around 1. 1 million part-time. The
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of male full-time
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went up from around 100, 000 in 1970/71 to over 200, 000 in 1990/91, whereas for part-time study their
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went down from 1 million in 1970/71 to around 850, 000 in 1980/81,
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