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Over weight can lead health problems. Causes and management

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Obesity is consider that common health problem of people. The increased weight of people will affect their health and body. In my opinion it is a true fact over weight can lead to some health issues. But proper awareness can reduce the over weight. Firstly, in the modern world, the life style of people has changed completely. They are eating various kind of western foods. Over eating of a food can lead to obesity. Secondly, the another cause of over weight is lack of exercise. People who live in the busy world have no time for doing exercise. Some people are very lazy. On the other hand, some people are obese because of hereditary factors. Another main reason of obesity was side effect of some drugs. For example, over use of Tab. Ranitidine leads to obesity. Over weight cannot be considered as a disease, that is a condition of our body. Firstly, people must restrict their over eating habits. Health authorities should provide awareness to the people to prepare a diet chart or consult a dietitian for improve good diet habit. Secondly, educate the people about the improvement of exercise in daily. Exercise reduces our blood pressure, and get good digestion and maintain our body well. Encourage them to do exercise. Ask them to take more water. Water is also good for our body building. To conclude, awareness and some measures reduces the obesity rate. It can also decrease health problems related to obesity.
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to prepare a diet chart or consult a dietitian for
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diet habit.
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about the improvement of
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exercise
in daily.
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digestion and maintain our
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well. Encourage them to do
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measures
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problems related to obesity.

IELTS academic Over weight can lead health problems. Causes and management

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