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Online sales in New Zealand

Online sales in New Zealand Q275b

The pie charts mentioned in above describes the sales via online platforms in New Zealand for the years 2003 and 2013. The sales departments considered here are Travel, Films / Music, Books and Clothes. The sales in the area of Film / Music have increased from 2003 to 2013 from 21% to 33%. Similarly, we could see the rates ameliorate in the Books department which has seen a sharp cling from 19% to 22%. Cloth department has seen a drip from 24% in 2003 to 16% in 2013. Similarly travel industry has also seen a declination from 36% to 29% in this span of 10 years. It is observed that the Literature and entertainment sectors have survived during the run where as Travel and Outfit industries have faced a hit during these times. We could conclude that Clothes are Travel are preferred offline in New Zealand, whereas, demand for entertainment products would grow high online.

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 a declination from 36% to 29% in this span of 10 years.

It is observed
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Travel
 and Outfit industries have faced a hit during these times. We could conclude that Clothes are You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtrekdrivingrideflyingexcursiontour
Travel
are preferred
 offline in New Zealand, whereas, demand for entertainment products would grow high online. 