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On analyzing expenditure on food and clothes, the proportion spent on clothes decreased from 22% in 2010 to 12% in 2013.

On analyzing expenditure on food and clothes, the proportion spent on clothes decreased from 22% in 2010 to 12% in 2013. 3mQd
On analyzing expenditure on food and clothes, the proportion spent on clothes decreased from 22% in 2010 to 12% in 2013. There was a notable increase in the figure for fruits and vegetables in terms of spending on food, from 20% to 35%. The proportion spent on dairy products also rose, reaching 20% in 2013. In contrast, while the percentage spent on other food and drink remained the same at 18%, the figure for spending on meat and fish fell significantly from 25% in 2010 to 15% in 2013. The table compares the lever of expenditure British earning for living and the amount of money they spent on food and clothes, while the bar charts illustrate the percentage of expense on those daily categories in a family on average over a three year period from 2010 to 2013. Overall, there was a dramatic downward trend in the level of income while this figure for the amount of expense they spent on food and clothes increased slightly. Another interesting point is that the food took a bigger proportion in the British people’s budget in comparison with clothes figure. Looking at details, in 2010 each family in Britain on average earned 29000 for living and they spent nearly half of that amount of money on food and clothes. Meanwhile, the level of income in 2013 fell enormously to 25000, this figure for spending on food and clothes rise slightly by 1000. On the other hand, in 2010 the expenditure on meat and fish and fruit and vegetable made up the majority in the total, by 26% and 29% in turn. However, in the next three years, while the percentage of money people paying for meat and fish dropped by 6%, this figure for fruit and vegetables went up to exactly 30%. Clothes and daily products also witness a contrasting trend. Their figure in 2010 was 15% and 12% respectively, but in 2013, the percentage of the family budget paid for daily products reach 16% as opposed to a 2% decrease in the figure for clothes. The money people spent on other food stayed unchanged at 18% over the period given.
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and
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, the proportion
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spent
on
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clothes
decreased from 22% in 2010 to 12% in 2013. There was a notable increase in the
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figure
for fruits and vegetables in terms of spending on
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food
, from 20% to 35%. The proportion
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spent
on dairy products
also
rose, reaching 20% in 2013.

In contrast
, while the
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percentage
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spent
on other
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food
and drink remained the same at 18%, the
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figure
for spending on meat and fish fell
significantly
from 25% in 2010 to 15% in 2013.

The table compares the lever of expenditure British earning for living and the amount of
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money
they
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spent
on
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food
and
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clothes
, while the bar charts illustrate the
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percentage
of expense on those daily categories in a family on average over a
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three year
period from 2010 to 2013.

Overall
, there was a dramatic downward trend in the level of income while this
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figure
for the amount of expense they
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spent
on
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food
and
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clothes
increased
slightly
. Another interesting point is that the
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food
took a bigger proportion in the British
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people
’s budget
in comparison
with
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clothes
figure.

Looking at
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details
, in 2010 each family in Britain on average earned 29000 for
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living and
they
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spent
nearly
half of that amount of
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money
on
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and
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. Meanwhile, the level of income in 2013 fell
enormously
to 25000, this
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figure
for spending on
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food
and
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rise
slightly
by 1000.

On the other hand
, in 2010 the expenditure on meat and fish and fruit and vegetable made up the majority in the total, by 26% and 29% in turn.
However
, in the
next
three years, while the
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of
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money
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people
paying for meat and fish dropped by 6%, this
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figure
for fruit and vegetables went up to exactly 30%.
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Clothes
and daily products
also
witness a contrasting trend. Their
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figure
in 2010 was 15% and 12%
respectively
,
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in 2013, the
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of the family budget paid for daily products reach 16% as opposed to a 2% decrease in the
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figure
for
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clothes
. The
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money
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people
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spent
on other
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food
stayed unchanged at 18% over the period
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IELTS academic On analyzing expenditure on food and clothes, the proportion spent on clothes decreased from 22% in 2010 to 12% in 2013.

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