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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. eWjK
The line graph illustrates application from foreign and local students to Australian universities in ten-year period. Overall, number of enrolments of local students was much higher than the overseas students. However, commencing rates for both types of students was lower than total number of enrolments. In the graph, it can be seen that in 2001, 20000 foreign students applied to Australian universities. In contrast, commencing rates was slightly lower than the total number of applications at around 17000. At the end of the period, even though both sections experienced dramatic increases gap between number of total and commencing enrolments is expanded significantly. (80000 total, 40000 commencing) When it comes to the local students, commencing rates were always lower than the total number of enrolments and remained stable at around 200000 enrolments with some fluctuations. However, total number of applications were at 400000 in 2001 but it increased rapidly until levelled off at 600000 enrolments in 2007 then it remained the same over the period. VotesThe graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates application from foreign and
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local
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students
to Australian universities in ten-year period.

Overall
,
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number
of
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enrolments
of
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local
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students
was much higher than the overseas
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students
.
However
,
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commencing
rates for both types of
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students
was lower than
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total
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number
of
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enrolments
.

In the graph, it can be
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seen
that in 2001, 20000 foreign
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students
applied to Australian universities.
In contrast
,
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commencing
rates was
slightly
lower than the
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total
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number
of applications at around 17000. At the
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end
of the period,
even though
both sections experienced dramatic increases gap between
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number
of
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total
and
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commencing
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enrolments
is expanded
significantly
. (80000
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total
, 40000 commencing)

When it
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comes
to the
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local
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students
,
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commencing
rates were always lower than the
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total
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number
of
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enrolments
and remained stable at around 200000
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enrolments
with
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some
fluctuations.
However
,
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total
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number
of applications were at 400000 in 2001
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but
it increased
rapidly
until levelled off at 600000
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enrolments
in 2007 then it remained the same over the period.

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graphs below
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show
the
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enrolments
of overseas
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students
and
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local
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students
in Australian universities over a
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ten year
period.

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Summarise
the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and
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make
comparisons where relevant.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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