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Number Of Olympic Medals Won By Twelve Different Countries

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The given graph illustrates the number of Olympic gold, silver and bronze medals secured by 12 countries. It is evident that the United States came up first among all by winning about 2300 medals and Japan got fewer than 400 medals. Soviet Union stood second in the list with a tally of 1000 medals while the UK and France stood third and fourth with 700 and 600 medals respectively. Germany and Italy have more or less the same number of medals which is a little over 500 with the later winning more Gold medals than the former. Meanwhile, Sweden and Hungary got the same number of medals but Hungary had more golds than Sweden. Japan and China stand at the bottom of the chart with the lowest number of medals. However, China bagged more gold medals than Japan. Overall, it is clear that the US dominated the Olympic games with a whopping 2300 medals whereas Japan and China won the fewest medals during the given time frame.
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graph illustrates the
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of Olympic gold, silver and bronze
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medals
secured by 12 countries. It is evident that the United States came up
first
among all by winning about 2300
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medals
and Japan
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got
fewer than 400
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. Soviet Union stood second in the list with a tally of 1000
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medals
while the UK and France stood third and fourth with 700 and 600
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respectively
.

Germany and Italy have more or less the same
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of
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which is a
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over 500 with the
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winning more Gold
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than the former. Meanwhile, Sweden and Hungary
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Hungary had more
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than Sweden. Japan and China stand at the bottom of the chart with the lowest
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.
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, China bagged more gold
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than Japan.

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, it is
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that the US dominated the
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Olympic games
with a whopping 2300
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whereas Japan and China won the fewest
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during the
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time frame.
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IELTS academic Number Of Olympic Medals Won By Twelve Different Countries

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