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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between year 2010 in 2017

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Given line graph illustrates how many traveller (in millions) pay a visit to a specific Caribbean Iceland during year 2010 and 2017. The graph also shows the stay of the tourists. It is noticeable that number of visitors was increased in span of these seven years. First of all, in 2010 less than half a million visitors preferred to stay on cruise ship, which had fluctuation in number till 2012. However, after 2012 the graph had aroused to 2 million people by 2017. On the other side tourists who liked to staying on island were more in 2010 which makes it 0. 75 million people. Which stayed same by 2011 and afterwards it rose to 1. 5 million in 2013. It followed same pattern however it fell down by0. 25 millions in year 2016. And again reached to 1. 5 by 2017. Moreover, total number of visitors constantly increased till 2015 and stayed same for a year. In 2017 numbers jumped from2. 75 to3. 5 millions. Overall, most people like stay in a cruise ship while visiting Caribbian island
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traveller
(in
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millions)
pay a visit to a specific Caribbean Iceland during year 2010 and 2017. The graph
also
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shows
the stay of the tourists. It is noticeable that
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number
of visitors
was increased
in span of these seven years.

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First of all
, in 2010 less than half a
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million
visitors preferred to stay on cruise ship, which had fluctuation in
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number
till 2012.
However
, after 2012 the graph had aroused to 2
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million
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people
by 2017. On the other side tourists who liked to staying on island were more in 2010 which
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makes
it 0. 75
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million
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people
. Which stayed same by 2011 and afterwards it rose to 1. 5
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million
in 2013. It followed same pattern
however
it fell down by0. 25
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millions
in year 2016. And again reached to 1. 5 by 2017.

Moreover
, total
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number
of visitors
constantly
increased till 2015 and stayed same for a year. In 2017
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numbers
jumped from2. 75 to3. 5 millions.

Overall
, most
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people
like stay in a cruise ship while visiting
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Caribbian
island

IELTS academic the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between year 2010 in 2017

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