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Nowadays young people admire sports stars though they often do no set a good example do you think this is a positive or negative development

Nowadays young people admire sports stars though they often do no set a good example do you think this is a positive or negative development NRL0
Fan base of athletes are accelerating at a pace most of the youngsters are in the list of their fans albeit they often do not set a good example for young blood I believe that this is a negative development as sports stars do most of the work for money and for gaining more and More followers To begin with money is a driving force that makes the world go around money have influential power that make anyone do anything for it same goes with athletes most of the stars do advertisement for plastic current
Fan base of athletes are accelerating at a pace most of the youngsters are in the list of their fans albeit they
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development as sports stars do most of the work for money and for gaining more and More followers To
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IELTS academic Nowadays young people admire sports stars though they often do no set a good example do you think this is a positive or negative development

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  American English
1 paragraphs
94 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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