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Nowadays, the way that people of all ages interact with each other is being shaped by social media. To what way is social media affecting the relationships that people make? Has this this become a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, the way that people of all ages interact with each other is being shaped by social media. To what way is social media affecting the relationships that people make? Has this this become a positive or negative development? nXmyn
The early 21st century saw a huge increase in interactive forms of network thanks to the widespread availability of the Internet such as flood of platforms has had a huge impact on people's correlations, both positively and negatively, but, on balance, I think this trend is advantageous. It is absolutely right that using social media in terms of having communication is beneficial. Take students studying in different countries, for example. They use social networking sites such as WhatsApp, Twitter and Telegramm to discuss educational topics and assignments. As a result, they broad their knowledge as well as horizon. Additionally, with the help of this trend introverts who are quiet and shy, and do not enjoy being with other people might have made new friends that have a lot in common and also there is possibility for being extrovert by improving communication skills. Likewise, instead of mailing something and having it take a few days to get there or even paying to mail it, we can go right on the web and have it sent to someone in a matter of seconds. So the benefits are enormous. On the other hand, along with the advantages social media, however, has largely disadvantages but it is mainly profitable development. Apart from the positive impact mentioned above, it conveys inauthentic expression of feelings and decrease face to face connection. In conclusion, despite the absolute negative affects of the social media, I personally believe that positives such as expanding knowledge, saving money and time outweigh any negatives.
The early 21st century
saw
a huge increase in interactive forms of network thanks to the widespread availability of the Internet such as flood of platforms has had a huge impact on
people
's correlations, both
positively
and
negatively
,
but
, on balance, I
think
this trend is advantageous. It is
absolutely
right that using
social
media in terms of having communication is beneficial. Take students studying in
different
countries,
for example
. They
use
social
networking sites such as WhatsApp, Twitter and
Telegramm
to discuss educational topics and assignments.
As a result
, they broad their knowledge
as well
as horizon.
Additionally
, with the
help
of this trend introverts who are quiet and shy, and do not enjoy being with other
people
might have made new friends that have a lot in common and
also
there is possibility for being extrovert by improving communication
skills
.
Likewise
,
instead
of mailing something and having it take a few days to
get
there or even paying to mail it, we can go right on the web and have it
sent
to someone in a matter of seconds.
So
the benefits are enormous.
On the other hand
, along with the advantages
social
media,
however
, has
largely
disadvantages
but
it is
mainly
profitable development. Apart from the
positive
impact mentioned above, it conveys inauthentic expression of feelings and decrease face to face connection.
In conclusion
, despite the absolute
negative
affects of the
social
media, I
personally
believe that positives such as expanding knowledge, saving money and time outweigh any negatives.
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