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As we can see in our day to day life luxury and consumption has incensed a lot, when coming to this diagram we can say that there was a huge difference from 1995 to 2011. In 1995 we can see food plays an important role in our live and here 50% of consumption is taken by food that's like half of the diagram, and next important survival is clothing which occupies 15% then comes to Education with a ratio of 10% and in household facilitate take up to 7% and coming to transportation its 5% and medicine with a 3% and other. But in 2011 there was a huge difference with Urben consumption that's it food consumption as decreased to 20% with a total of 36% but transportation and increased with a 14% and education had increased to 12% but clothing with a 11%, residential with a 9% and coming to household facilitate and medicine with 7% and other with 4% of incensed.
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IELTS academic now a day in the live were we see

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3 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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