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Money invested in stock market in Some country

Money invested in stock market in Some country pL0gw

The bar graph demostrates that how people made an investment with their savings in market in Somecountry over a six-year period from 2001 to 2006. In general, it can be seen from the graph that the money invested on stocks were always much more bigger than bonds’ values, and also, both bonds and stocks saw an incerease of the funds over the given period. The bonds started the period with aproximately 100 billions in stock market valuation and they rose gradually over the years. Finally, their values reached about 188 billions which were the peak value in 2006. The maximum climb was happened in 2003, people tended to fund much more money on bonds than previous year’s figures. On the other hand, the stocks saw 210 billions in the maket in 2001 and then these figures went up steadily from 2001 to 2006. At the end, their figures climbed almost 311 billions. In additionally, the biggest jump was 62 billions which arose in 2004.

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demostrates
 that how This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 made an investment with their savings in market in Possible spelling mistake found.Some country
Somecountry
 over a six-year period from 2001 to 2006.

In general
, it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 from the graph that the money invested on stocks were always much Use only "bigger" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.bigger
more bigger
 than bonds’ values, and also
, both bonds and stocks This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 an Possible spelling mistake found.increase
incerease
 of the funds over the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 period.

The bonds This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 the period with Possible spelling mistake found.approximately
aproximately
 100 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billions
 in stock market Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).valuation, and
valuation and
 they rose gradually
 over the years. Finally
, their values reached about 188 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billions
 which were the peak value in 2006. The maximum climb was happened
 in 2003, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 tended to fund much more money on bonds than previous year’s figures.

On the other hand
, the stocks This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 210 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billions
 in the Possible spelling mistake found.makemakesmarketmakerMakerMamet
maket
 in 2001 and then these figures went up steadily
 from 2001 to 2006. At the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
, their figures climbed almost 311 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billions
. In additionally
, the biggest jump was 62 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlotstons
billions
 which arose in 2004. 