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Mining site in the past and in the present

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The given map shows the significant difference between the site of mining town in the past and in the present the day. Overall, it is clear that the whole mining site has been reconstructed except the main entrance and the parking lot. In detail, In the past the west side of mining site were having office and staff's changing room which is now converted into the Museum. Similarly, the east side of the site were having two large waste pits and in the present it replaced with driving truck track, picnic area along with children's playground. Another major changes in the site is that the medical room which was at the centre of the mining site has been turned into the cafe. Along with medical room their was a larry parking which is now converted into the footpath. There are only two things which are unchanged that is the main entrance and the parking lot. Nevertheless l, in the past, the main entrance was for workers and in the present it is for the visitors.
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the significant difference between the
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site
of
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mining
town in the past and in the present the day.
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, it is
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clear
that the whole
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mining
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site
has
been reconstructed
except the main entrance and the parking lot.

In detail, In the past the west side of
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mining
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site
were having office and staff's changing room which is
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now
converted into the Museum.
Similarly
, the east side of the
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site
were having two large waste pits and in the present it replaced with driving truck
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track
, picnic area along with children's playground.

Another major
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changes
in the
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site
is that the medical room which was at the
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centre
of the
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mining
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site
has
been turned
into the
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cafe
. Along with medical room
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their
was a
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parking which is
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now
converted into the footpath.

There are
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two things which
are unchanged
that is
the main entrance and the parking lot.
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Nevertheless
l, in the past, the main entrance was for workers and in the present it is for the visitors.
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IELTS academic Mining site in the past and in the present

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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