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The given pie charts gives information about the proportion of students those will be joining North West University.

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The given pie charts gives information about the proportion of students those will be joining North West University. Overall we can see that there are two pie charts one giving data about the percentage of students from various Departments in the University and other information about number of Art Students from various continents (Europe, Asis, Africa, Autralia, South America) who are not from USA in the University. In the University Arts students occupies the Higest percentage of 23% which is slightly higer than Computing (22%) and science(21%) students. Next stands in the row is the Business students with 14%. Remaining all department students are less thgan 10% with Engineering 9%, Medicine 5% and the least are the Law students with 4%. Coming to the Art students who are not from United States most stuents are from South America which is two third of all remaining non US resident students. From the remaining students 21 are from Europe, 6 from Asia, 4 from Australia and the least from Africa who are just 2 in number.
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students
from various Departments in the University and other information about number of Art
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Students
from various continents (Europe,
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, Africa,
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Autralia
, South America) who are not
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from USA
in the University.

In the University Arts
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occupies the
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percentage of 23% which is

slightly
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than Computing (22%) and science(21%)
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.
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stands in the row
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is


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the
Business
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students
with 14%. Remaining all department
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are less
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thgan
10%
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with


Engineering 9%, Medicine 5% and the least are the Law
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students
with 4%.

Coming to the Art
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who are not from United States most
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are from South

America which is two third of all remaining non US resident
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. From the remaining
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21 are from Europe, 6 from Asia, 4 from Australia and the least from Africa who are
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2 in number.
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