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Mehandi given map shows the changes in an American city during to 1948 and 2000

Mehandi given map shows the changes in an American city during to 1948 and 2000 pJLN9

The rendered map depicts the information about how an American town transformed, by providing how it looked like in two different years 1948 and 2000. Overall, exception of towns south-east residential area, new structure have built and changes have been made, but the total area neither expanded nor contracted. On scrutinizing the map it can be witnessed that the factories in northeast corner were demolished to build an airport and several commercial buildings. Similarly, a supermarket replaced the lake which had been next to the factories. It is also worth noticing that four commercial buildings were also constructed on the south-west of new supermarket. They were located on both sides of the big road, with two on each side. A church in South side in 1948 was replaced by sports stadium in 2000. On the other hand, several features of these towns did not change throughout the period. The natural elements, a canal and trees to be remain untouched. The road system did not change either with two small and two big roads. Additionally, A petrol station in the north was kept intact and residential houses in the bottom right corner, unlike those on the other side of canal.

The rendered map depicts the information about how an American town transformed, by providing how it looked like in two This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 years 1948 and 2000.

Overall
, The usual collocation for "exception" in this context is "to" not "of". Did you mean "exception to"?exception to
exception of
 towns south-east residential area, new structure have built and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 have been made
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 the total area neither expanded nor contracted.

On scrutinizing the map it can be witnessed
 that the factories in northeast corner were demolished
 to build an airport and several commercial buildings. Similarly
, a supermarket replaced the lake which had been next
 to the factories. It is also
 worth noticing that four commercial buildings were also
 constructed on the south-west of new supermarket. They were located
 on both You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsectorbottomtopsurfacehandpart
sides
 of the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 road, with two on each side. A church in South side in 1948 was replaced
 by sports stadium in 2000.

On the other hand
, several features of these towns did not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 throughout the period. The natural elements, a canal and trees to be Consider using a past participle here: "remained".remained
remain
 untouched. The road system did not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 either with two This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 and two This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 roads. Additionally
, A petrol station in the north was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 intact and residential This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residences
houses
 in the bottom right corner, unlike those on the other side of canal. 