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Turning to the bar chart and table indicates statistics about the facts of medical care facilities and health fund in the different countries.

Turning to the bar chart and table indicates statistics about the facts of medical care facilities and health fund in the different countries. KGWa0
The bar chart illustrates the number of hospital beds available for patients in 8 different countries while the table compares government spending and life expectancy in three of those countries, Japan, the Netherlands and the USA. Overall we can see that although Japan spends the least on health care, it has the highest life expectancy and the most beds available for its people. A closer look at the graph shows that most of the countries mentioned only have around 4 beds available per thousand people. There are two exceptions to this, Germany, who have twice that number, and Japan, whose number is significantly higher, at 14 beds for every thousand people. From the table we can see that the USA, which has the highest healthcare expenditure of the three countries mentioned ($6, 719 per person), has a life expectancy of only 78. As mentioned previously, Japan spends the least on health care, only $2, 581 per person. Despite this Japan’s people can expect to live to be 83 years of age, 3 years longer than people in the Netherlands, whose government spend $900 more on them.
The bar chart illustrates the number of hospital
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beds
available for patients in 8
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different
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countries
while the table compares
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government
spending and life expectancy in three of those
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countries
,
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Japan
, the Netherlands and the USA.

Overall
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see
that although
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Japan
spends the least on health care, it has the highest life expectancy and the most
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beds
available for its
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people
.

A closer look at the graph
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shows
that most of the
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mentioned
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have around 4
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beds
available per thousand
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people
. There are two exceptions to this, Germany, who have twice that number, and
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Japan
, whose number is
significantly
higher, at 14
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beds
for every thousand
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people
.

From the table we can
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that the USA, which has the highest healthcare expenditure of the three
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mentioned ($6, 719 per person), has a life expectancy of
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only
78. As mentioned previously,
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Japan
spends the least on health care,
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only
$2, 581 per person. Despite this
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Japan’s
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people
can
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expect
to
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to be 83 years of age, 3 years longer than
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in the Netherlands, whose
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spend $900 more on them.

IELTS academic Turning to the bar chart and table indicates statistics about the facts of medical care facilities and health fund in the different countries.

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186 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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